Date: 2010-03-18 03:48 pm (UTC)
I really enjoy reading the way you write Elijah. He seems to be a little bit suspicious of Orlando, and I think it's understandable. This chapter, in my opinion, showed the struggle Elijah was feeling. He really wanted to make sure everything was perfect because I think he was afraid of what Orlando would think. Even though it's still early, Elijah seems to feel a connection with Orlando and I can't wait to see how this develops.

Great job, sweetie. You really did a great job showing Elijah's fragility.

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